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The Magician's Circus - by Alicia


What a wonderful story, Alicia! Every time I see you weekly writing, I see more and more improvements. You work so very hard and think so carefully about what you write. There are funny parts in this story - I laughed aloud at 'Froggy'! Your descriptions really bring the circus to life. You use a variety of sentence openers to show the passing of time and to move the plot forward: Without warning; Almost pushing; and 'As hours passed'. Also, you have included so much direct speech into the story. It's really tricky do do correctly, and you have done and amazing job with this, remembering new speaker, new line. A huge well done!