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The Magical Circus - by Adrian


What a lovely way to start your writing Adrian! It made me want to read on. It's great how you describe smell first as your character wakes up. This shows us that he is slightly confused and is using clues around him to find out. Your punctuation is excellent, and I can see commas, questions marks and an exclamation mark. There's also  short sentence: "Oh no!" You have a very good structure with a beginning, middle and end. Well done!