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The Magic Tree - by Caron


Thank you for sharing this writing with us, Caron. You wrote this is a short space of time during Powerful Writers' Club and just after the class, and it's very impressive. You have a well-chosen time opening phrase to deposit your reader straight into the setting and action. This is a very good technique. You also describe the surroundings well, commenting on sounds and sights (birds tweeting and leaves fluttering). You also detailed direct speech. Your opening phrases (fronted adverbials) include commas - so, great attention to punctuation there as well! Well done.