The Circus - by Eva
The start to your story about the circus is intriguing, Eva: 'I woke up and saw a jug of water in my hand.' This really makes me want to read more. You describe the circus in a wonderfully detailed way, such as the 'red-nosed man with colourful clothes'. The fact that your character is high-up, balancing on a monkey bar makes us wonder what is going to happen. This is a great technique in a story. Once your character gets home, the line, 'I couldn't bare to live my life like that', shows that they are reflecting back on their experience. This is a great story-writing technique. Well done!
It is also important to let people know that with your sister, Amaira, you have written a fantastic collection of 8 short stories (fables) and they are for sale on Amazon. They are brilliantly written, funny and have amazing illustrations.
All proceeds of your book sale go to the charity 'Being Purple' (www.beingpurple.co.uk), which is a charity to promote awareness around disability and inclusion.