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Space - by Haadiyah


Thank you for sharing your writing about finding yourself in space, Haadiyah. It is wonderful! What an interesting beginning - falling into a picture and finding yourself in space. You have described your emotions really well and asking a rhetorical question helps the reader to identify with the character.

I am also impressed that you have accurately written an extremely complex sentence including the coordinating conjunctions 'so and 'for'.

There was nothing I could do, so I stayed still and hoped someone would help, for I knew the slightest movement would send me further away into the galaxy.

This can be very tricky, so a huge well done!