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Harry and the Cub - by Talha

11.11.21

This is a wonderful story, Talha. Thank you for sharing this with us. You have used lots of lovely description here and it's nice to see that after the speech you have told us how the boy spoke his words - 'with a smile'. It's super to see that you have used so much dialogue here to help to move the plot forward. You have used fronted adverbials to show both TIME and Place: 'A few hours later / Soon / Just then / Under the ground'.

Well done and thank you for sharing!

Harry and the Cub - by Talha