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The Crime - by Haadiyah


Thank you for sharing this with us, Haadiyah! I was captivated by the plot (which starts with an intriguing first sentence), and you have used dialogue to move the story along. This dialogue is well set out - this is tricky when you have lots of people speaking in succession. Well done!

Your 'Show, Don't Tell'  details for the character really help to set the scene and tell us more about how they are feeling. Well done!

'Peter paced the room nervously. The inspector seemed to be thinking hard.'

The Crime - by Haadiyah