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Children's writing: The moss covered tortoise - by Amila

09.02.22

 

I loved the way you started the story in the present and then used flashbacks to a time before this, Amila. The plot idea is great and you describe the scientists feeling threatened by Mirabelle to such an extent that they try to poison her and even send assassins! But, she prevails.
Your language is carefully chosen and you take great care to think of how it can be used in a sentence and then how these sentences work together. This means that your flow through the paragraphs is clear and easy to read.
 
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