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Children's writing: The Golden Orb - by Khaqan

17.02.22

 

Thank you for sharing your writing, Khaqan. It is super to see how you have carefully chosen words to help your reader build an image in their mind. You have used, 'golden orb' for the balloon and 'powder-blue' to describe the peaceful, nonthreatening sky. Your choice of verbs also helps to build a vivid image (cracked / glistened / crumbled), and they are onomatopoeic as well, which helps us to image the sounds. Excellent. Well done.

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