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The Mysterious Shop - by Anniyah


What a great way to start this story! You really lead your reader in here, Anniyah: '...a boring street in a boring city.' It makes we wonder what on earth is going to happen here!  You have used excellent descriptions of the creaking door, the character's spine tingling and the shop being dark and dimly lit. You have also set out your writing with great attention to the atmosphere created by the words. You have chosen the colours, the font and the image perfectly. Well done!