The Best Chocolate in Town - by Ruby
This certainly sounds like the best chocolate in town, Ruby! If I ever need to sell a chocolate bar, I'll ask you to write about it for me to persuade people to buy it!
You have chosen powerful and enticing verbs and adjectives to build a wonderful picture in our minds: filled, melting, oozing, smothered and drizzle.
You have started your sentences in different ways, such as: 'As you pop...' and 'With each chew...'.
The link back to Roald Dahl is a good reminder of one of children's best-loved books all about chocolate!
Well done, Ruby, and thank you for sharing your lovely writing.