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Sequencing ideas and giving character detail - by Talha

11.10.21

You did a great job here, Talha, thinking of lots of separate sentences to explain the sequence of actions. You used the 'three-window technique' to imagin what the character was doing as he passed by three different windows.

You have chosen some lovely action verbs (leapt/dashed) and you have included a simile! Well done!