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Circus Awake - by Caron

18.05.21

'I wondered where this adventure would leave me: maybe in the depths of despair.'

Caron, I know it's rare to start my comment for children's work with a last sentence - but this is so fabulous. What a way to end! It is a cliff hanger, and really makes the reader ponder on not only the next adventure, but also what has gone before. You have also done a really good job of using a variety of punctuation here, including lots of direct speech, which can be tricky to get right. Well done!