Children's writing: verb choice in story writing - by Selena

This is a super way to draw your reader straight into the story, Selena - by stating that the character failed to spot something. Immediately, I wanted to know what this was - so I read on. 

In our weekly writing club this week, we were looking at the use of verbs and how choosing the right one from a list of synonyms can make slight differences in meaning. I can see here that you have used some very well-chosen verbs: absorbed, engrossed, floated, appeared, exploded etc. You have included lots of other excellent techniques such as punctuation for effect (ellipses and inverted commas for speech), ISPACED adverbial openers and figurative language. Well done and thank you for sharing!

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