Children's writing: opening adjectives - by Khaqan

What a super range of descriptions to create a vivid image of this giant, Khaqan. Your writing is peppered with well-chosen adjectives and strong verb choices, such as describing the giant falling to the ground, knees first. All these contribute to a successful 'Show Don't Tell' writing technique. 

You wrote this during one of our Weekly Writing Clubs where we look at a new picture each week and learn a new writing skill – and this week, for Year 5, this was trying out opening adjectives. You explored and discussed the image, learnt new vocabulary and ways to use it and then tried out a new skill (opening adjectives). Then, you produced this piece of writing! And, all in just 50 minutes. What an achievement!

Starting your writing with the opening adjectives, 'Slumped and silent', draws your reader straight in to thinking about the giant. You use another set of opening adjectives, 'Prickly and razor-sharp' to describe the matted undergrowth.

 

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