Children's writing: a story - by Alicia

Wow! What an opening sentence, Alicia. This is packed with imagery. There is the colour description for the clouds, then you personify the sky as it battles the bright sun; they desire ownership of the wasteland.

Here, you have also created a metaphor as the abstract noun 'boredom' smothers the boy.

When I read such powerful sentences like this right at the start of a piece of writing, I know I'm in for a treat. So, let's share this excellent story.

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