Children's writing: The Mysterious Town - by Reyansh

This is a wonderful description of a very stormy and wild night in a city, Reyansh.

You have packed your writing with very well observed adjectives and verbs (e.g., shark-looking houses / three-chimneyed building / sodden) as well as a simile (like a fire in a house).

You also used repetition of 'the more' to show the intensity of the situation:

The more the magnitude of the earthquake, the more destruction there would be.

Your sentence, 'It looked familiar, but it felt dangerous.' is excellent in creating tension and fear in your reader.

Thanks for sharing!

Let's read ...

The Mysterious Town - by Reyansh

The cars were in a complete traffic jam! As they went past the shark-looking houses, their shoes were sodden. What was this town? It looked familiar, but it felt dangerous. There was a terrible earthquake and rain.

The more the magnitude of the earthquake, the more destruction there would be. Everybody could see the three-chimneyed building from far away. The lights were so strong like a fire in a house. The earthquake was so strong that they had to go in their bunkers.

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