Children's writing: a mythical beast - by Selena
06.10.22
This story transported me into a magical and mythical world, and I just had to read on! As you always do, you have chosen excellent vocabulary to help your reader to imagine the characters and setting ('dingy maze' , 'strong as steel' , 'licked her lips hungrily' etc.). A superb piece, Selena!
Let's read ...
The Pegasus
Emma had to defeat the pegasus as she was stealing colourful parrot eggs from the Magical Eden Tree. But the only way to pass was through the dingy maze. Bella (who Emma had met on the way) had given her a twining string, that was as strong as steel, and a silver-grey dagger. Emma slipped it through her pocket.
As Emma dashed through every corner of the gloomy maze, she eventually noticed the ecru pegasus and stepped cautiously towards her. The pegasus had wings that were extra-large compared to her hideous body! Parts of her blunt horn had been nibbled by the furious parrots. In the distance, Emma realised that she was going to be devoured next...
But the pegasus had never eaten a human before, or has she? Emma pondered. As the cold breeze filled the room, Emma shivered. She took a few baby steps back. Bang! Her head jolted as she bumped her head on the damp, rocky wall. Now, Emma's heart was pounding as the pegasus licked her lips hungrily with drooling saliva. Quickly, Emma pulled out her dagger and sliced the pegasus's head off. Clank!
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