Children's writing: The Moon - by Onvi

This is such a captivating way to draw your reader into this writing, Onvi. Starting with the character's name immediately makes us want to know more about her.

You have carefully set the mood at the beginning by choosing soft verbs, adverbs and adjectives (swayed, gently, gazing, moonlit). you then break this calm with a one-word onomatopoeia - Snap! 

Thanks for sharing your super writin.

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