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character description by ed, age 11


The Thug, by Ed

Like a drunken man he staggered towards me. His pot belly rumbled repeatedly. I averted my gaze but then stared into his eyes.They were green. Well, that's what I could see through his black, swollen eye. He shouted, "Have you seen a small girl wearing a pink top?"

See below: A great use of character vocabulary to tell a story Ed. I immediately wondered why he had a swollen eye, and it made me feel wary of this character. Thank you for sharing. Great job!