Character description - by ed
Thank you for sharing this with us Ed. It's wonderful to see that you went back and checked all your notes and rough draft sentences that we did in class, and then re-wrote it to improve! You have a great use of language, and I like the simile as well.The sentence that sticks out for me is:
'His threadbare and rancid-smelling vest had seen better days and wouldn't have looked out of place in a skip (and the stench was enough to cut through metal).'
It's very funny. Humour is a great way to entertain your reader. Well done!