The Hogwarts Encounter - by Alicia
Well, Alicia, your amazing sentence openers strike me first with your writing. What a wonderful range (e.g., prepositional phrases and adverbs): As I reached out , Inside, Immediately, Suddenly, A second later , Before I could even reach ...
You include figurative language with a simile and onomatopoeia with "EAK" and "SWISH", as well as a nice selection of adjectives and alternative verb choices. Well done and thank you very much for sharing this with us.
The Hogwarts Encounter, by Alicia