The Attic - by Eva
This is a fantastic story idea, Eva: a child goes to work with her gardener father to the old, mysterious manor house and she is allowed to explore all by herself! As a reader, I almost want to say to her, 'Don't do it!' I hope you write the rest of this. What happens in the attic? What does she find? You've said she 'tiptoed' and she was 'scared'. Oh no - this doesn't sound good! Well done and thank you for sharing!
It is also important to let people know that with your sister, Amaira, you have written a fantastic collection of 8 short stories (fables) and they are for sale on Amazon. They are brilliantly written, funny and have amazing illustrations.
All proceeds of your book sale go to the charity 'Being Purple' (www.beingpurple.co.uk), which is a charity to promote awareness around disability and inclusion.
The Attic, by Eva