powerful writers' club - shrunk by sameeha
Aside from this being a wonderfully descriptive story Sameeha, I have spotted the notes at the top of your paper that you took at the beginning of the class. This is such a brilliant learning skill that you have - jotting down key learning points to incorporate into your writing. So, we can see onomatopoeia in your writing (such as 'whoosh'), and you noted that a synonym for carefully could be 'cautiously'. You also noted that we try to aim for 'show don't tell' in our writing. I am so impressed. Well done!