Children's writing: The Outland - by Anniyah

It's wonderful to see that you are inspired to write at home, Anniyah. I love this style of writing - it's talking to the reader in the second person (If you ...). It drew me in from the start. Well done and thank you so much or sharing.

Let's read ...

Outland

If you asked Daisy before her trip to Junice if she fitted in an outcast school, she would have said “Erm, what is that?”, but now she is the lead of an outcast school.

Daisy is the Outland leader, which means that she has control over everything. From students, to the new school extensions. Before Outland, Daisy Liv Westchester went to a school in San Francisco. She loved it there, and she had many friends. She also had the best grades, and she was amazing in sports. She was one of the prettiest girls ever seen, with long brunette hair and emerald green eyes.

Daisy is 14, and was born on the 12th of December in 2008. Summer was only a day away, and she had planned to go to Junice with her grandparents. Her parents had died in a car crash in Junice when Daisy was 10, during a business trip. Daisy, or Daiz (as everyone calls her) has been bubbling with excitement and nervousness. She and her grandparents were mostly going because their parents own a school or something, and it needs seeing to. It’s under the grandmas name, and Daiz is extremely exited to see everyone that goes to her parents school.

But before that, there was a big exam that she had to take to make sure that she go to the next grade. Soon after the exam, Daiz was running out of the school and into the car. She had to pack yet, and she loved travelling. She rushed through the main door, and ran to pack. Their flight was in an hour, and she was rushing to get everything ready asap. Soon, she was ready to go!

To be continued…