Children's writing: The Mysterious House - by Alicia

Alicia, you have used pretty much all the elements from a writer's toolkit to create this stunning piece of writing. Not only have you used language and sentence structure techniques to create tension, but you have also thought carefully about how to portray the main character, Umber.

"Sweat slid off his cheeks as his face turned to the colour of snow."

This description is unusual, and therefore original. If a character is sweaty yet the colour of snow, they are in a bad way! Excellent 'Show, Don't Tell'.

Thank you for sharing this super work.

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