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Children's writing: The Kraken - by Selena

06.10.22

What a fabulous kraken story, Selena! This is jam-packed full of well-chosen openers, as well as powerful adjectives and verbs (such as '... poked its tentacles through the mast ...'). Your story structure is very clear and guides the reader well. Thank you so much for sharing this!

 

Let's read ...

 

The menacing kraken👿
As Jake heaved the cast net into the boat, he realised that there was more fish than normal. His cheeks glowed as he pulled and pulled. Suddenly, the darkness captured the sky and a slimy tentacle emerged.

It was a kraken! The colossal carnivore poked its tentacles through the mast. The boat was rocking  roughly as the cold breeze filled the air. The menacing kraken was splashing water, as its venomous saliva slithered through the window. No one could escape this perilous monster!

By now, Jake was concealing behind a rusty, steel crate. As quick as a flash, he picked up his backpack (which was placed by the sailing wheel) and glanced at the contents: a torch, an ancient compas and a crumpled old map.

With the aid of the compass and the map, Jake could sail back to "Steep Hill" (where Jake lives). But them, the wind howled and there were violent splashes of waves. Silvery lightning had struck the boat. 

Squirt! Squirt! How am I supposed to drive to land with this menacing kraken always behind my tail? Jake thought. It will not be easy! So, Jake was stuck. Again. How would he be able to do it? Ink splattered across Jake! Jake knew what he had to do…

Jake had known a few tricks up his sleeve. To get rid of this kraken, he would need his torch. He would shine the bright light at the menacing monster's eyes. A few minutes later, there was a huge splash! Jake had finally done it! He had defeated the creature. Quickly, Jake sailed towards “Steep Village” and scurried towards his home🏡.  

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