Children's writing: The Cave - by Reyansh

You are so talented at setting the scene in a story, Reyansh. You always consider the five senses and use figurative language to help the reader to image the action exactly.

I love the simile, 'crocodile green roots that looked like fingers', the personification of the cave, 'The cave beckoned him towards a tunnel', and 'a thunderous echo'.

Thanks for sharing this excellent writing.

Let's read ...


The Cave

Reyansh was a small , little boy who lived in London. His father asked him to get some water from the well to clean the outdoor tiles of the house (which were organised in check pattern with the colours of: emerald-green, diamond-blue and cream-white).

He pulled the rope of the well, but something unusual happened…A secret door opened with four tunnels! The cave was an oasis of light and sound. It was ghostly black hole. It had crocodile green roots that looked like fingers. It had an earthy and organic smell. When I stepped on the floor, I got a feeling of slugs on my feet. When I touched the tunnel, it was a bit moist. I heard a thunderous echo in the darkness and saw a creature in a dirty and damp area. The cave beckoned him towards a tunnel but no one knew if it was a trap or not….