Children's writing: setting description - by Sanil

Sanil, thank you for sharing this super piece of writing. Your language choices are so well chosen: they build atmosphere and tension brilliantly.

For example:

Personification: ... a putrid smell hovered ... / wispy clouds danced 

Simile: ...like tiny toy soldiers / like thick, black mascara

Metaphor: ... eating my nerves / animosity grew in me

Let's read ...