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Children's writing: The Lamppost - by Reyansh

09.02.23

 

 

You have jumped straight into the action here when writing about this picture, Reyansh, and what a good choice! You have used personification to describe the wind pulling and shoving, as well as a simile joined with personification to describe the it hunting the man.

Example:

Personification: 

A bit later, the wind shoved and pulled at me ferociously.

 

Personification + simile:

It was like the tornado hunted me like a beast!

 

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The Lamppost

A bit later, the wind shoved and pulled at me ferociously. It was like the tornado hunted me like a beast!

The big shoe of thunder and dark clouds sucked me up! There was a big explosion and then, I heard a thunderous echo… I tried to call someone, but no one answered because the internet was really poor! The lustrous-gold thunderbolt shot something although I was scared, I grabbed hold of a broken lamppost. It crashed and howled overhead in the sky. Later on, the ghoul-grey sky was torn apart and the petrifying storm had ended and I had got home.